Thenurion seems to spin 180 degrees pretty quickly for a wounded man between panels 2 and 3- I might recommend having panel 2 showing him somewhere in the act of getting up and rolling over at the same time, so it’s not as jarring.
Saphira’s last line seems kind of awkward… maybe leave out the air molecules bit and have Thenurion say it? “Glad to see you’re feeling strong enough to rebuild your uniform”/”Thanks to your loving care- and a few air molecules, of course” sounds more natural to me. Also, the change of subject from his physical state to his previous mission seems rather sudden, but maybe that’s just how Thenurion rolls.
Thenurion seems to spin 180 degrees pretty quickly for a wounded man between panels 2 and 3- I might recommend having panel 2 showing him somewhere in the act of getting up and rolling over at the same time, so it’s not as jarring.
Saphira’s last line seems kind of awkward… maybe leave out the air molecules bit and have Thenurion say it? “Glad to see you’re feeling strong enough to rebuild your uniform”/”Thanks to your loving care- and a few air molecules, of course” sounds more natural to me. Also, the change of subject from his physical state to his previous mission seems rather sudden, but maybe that’s just how Thenurion rolls.